San Diego State University College Degrees in Human Resources Questions

Teachers Suggestions!!!

I’d add the following questions:

1. This is an excellent opening move, isn’t it? Why would it be especially effective for this particular topic and intended audience?

2. The first paragraph, with its detailed description of data, strikes me as the strongest one here. What is it about this that would appeal to a professor of business engaged in formal research?

3. The research question here is sort of hidden away towards the end of the first paragraph, almost as though the first paragraph is a traditional “essay” introduction. Looking at the samples, where would you suggest shifting this? Why might that be useful?

4. The second paragraph here actuallly seems to be starting to answer the question, and doing this isn’t the purpose of the introduction – the introduction provides background that shows where the question comes from and why it’s important to the reader. How might this draft be reorganized in the revision process to take on this work?