Northern Virginia Community College Community Needs Research Paper

You helped me wrote 2 paged narrative essay about a week ago. It was a rough draft, and I sent it to the professor. I got the feedback from him and a review from my classmate. Could you please to fix it following the prof’s and my friend’s feedback. I will attach the paper you wrote for me as well as the requirement again, so you can somewhat rewind the memory ;-).

Feedback from Prof:

So remember that Kansas CIty is in Missouri.???? I sugges tnarrowing the focus even more. If you want to focus on the elderly or children do that. It is so broad right now. I would even suggest narrowing it down from Kansas City to a smaller town or smaller community. Do you think you could reasonably have access to all of Kansas City? Once you focus other parts will fall into place such as resources and ways to meet that need.

Feedback from classmate:

Your content throughout is very effective and thorough. Your ‘issue or problems’ paragraph was detailed and provided various explanations of the overall issue. One suggestion that I have is to give ‘potential solutions’ its own paragraph. While reading your assessment, I got most of the information about solutions from the logic model itself and I think it may be beneficial if this is also clearly stated within your narrative paper. I believe it will help the reader see a solution equally as much as you showed the issue in the earlier parts of your paper.