MCCS The Yellow Wallpaper Discussion and Battle Royal by Ralph Ellison Essay

hello Lincolvin, you did my essay for the Explication essay… and know there are classmates that had done a peer review on my essay can you see what they said and fix the essay you done please

I will send you what the student had replied ,, below is what the student had replied on ur essay you have submitted for me.. please go over it and redue what mistakes have been made please thank youu

Explication Peer Review

1. How does your peer get the reader’s attention in the introduction? Does the introduction identify the passage to be explicated? What is the thesis? Is it specific and arguable? Does it offer insight about what the passage is saying or doing? What, if any, details, explanations, or information could be added?

I did not find a very attention grabbing introduction in this paper. The passage does identify what is going to be explicated. I am a little confused I believe passage was mixed up in place of story. I don’t believe the thesis is very specific or arguable. I would give your interpretation more.

2. Evaluate the strengths of the explication. Which interpretations seem most accurate or insightful? What textual evidence is particularly strong and effective? Be specific.

This was a good explication, . “Son, after I’m gone I want you to keep up the good fight. I never told you, but our life is a war and I have been a traitor all my born days, a spy in the enemy’s country ever since I give up my gun back in the Reconstruction,” (Ellison 15). His father’s words indicate the struggle that the narrator began in the passage of the battle royal.

3. Evaluate areas of weakness in the explication, if any. Where might your peer give more details about his/her interpretations? Where might more textual evidence be needed? Be specific.

Honestly, I think you are a bit confused on the assignment. I see you explicating briefly the whole story here, and not a passage (piece of the story consisting of a 1 or more paragraphs).

4. Evaluate the organization of the paper. Where might coherence be improved, and where might clarification still be necessary?

See above comment, pick one passage and go in depth on it. No need for headers throughout the paper either.

5. How effectively are textual references incorporated? Are quotations used correctly and accurately? Does your peer give readers enough context to follow these references even if they haven’t read the text?

Yes, quotations are used correctly. I think it’s a good paper just not what is asked for.

6. Check your peer’s paper against the rubric. Where do you see the need for improvement?

I think there needs a bit of work before turning in, as stated above.

7. List anything else your classmate could focus on in the revision process.