ENGL 120 GC Controlling Strategies & Efforts in Health Sector Discussion

Hello,

Please read the essay I attached below and answer the questions in easy English.

1. What is the paper’s thesis? Is it clearly stated in the introduction (the first or second paragraph)? State the argument in your own words. If it’s not clear what the argument is, how can it be clarified?
2. Does the student writer introduce the source text and author he/she is responding to in the introduction? Is this done fluidly and efficiently? If not, how and where could the text and author in question be introduced exactly? Write out your specific suggestions.
3. Does the writer begin each body paragraph with a claim or main idea? Does the rest of the paragraph build off this main idea? Are these related to the main argument/thesis? Are the claims supported by evidence from the source text? State what the main ideas are. If this isn’t clear, offer specific suggestions.
4. How does your peer conclude the paper? Do they cohesively reflect upon the entire essay? Do they remind the reader what their argument is? Do they suggest any further areas or venues to explore in regards to their subject matter? What advice could you provide for the paper’s conclusion or what do you feel was done effectively in the conclusion?
5. What major grammatical/punctuation/syntactic issues need to be remedied in the paper? Do these compromise its clarity and effectiveness? Make suggestions.
6. What areas is the paper most successful in (i.e., thesis, introduction, body, conclusion, claims, evidence, etc…)? List these and comment on them.
7. What areas does the paper need further revision in (look at previous question)?